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Jack Render's avatar

You could probably make them work as a single completed poem. I did like these lines:

"I'm paralyzed by how much I want you

What time is it?

It's time to move on..."

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Virith's avatar

ah... wow. You stunned us briefly with just the first snippet.

the second made us smile in our own bittersweet sentimentality.

third... well... this felt cold and hot, urgent and stuck, like frozen lightning.

fourth... shadow cathedral... murmured hymns and half-felt, half-dream vows.

fifth... an oddly gravitational obsession, what moons has it pulled rogue from your tide?

sixth... what a twist. Brilliant and dark at once.

seventh... just? JUST? There is nothing just about that. Whether by existence justified or crimes justly punished, or on the run with a warrant on your borders.

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